Pavement

[Philatone]

looking at the latest version without seeing the inspiration behind it, to see how the piece stands on its merit. i'll try to revisit after seeing the link later

v2.0

White with red line, strip, stumbles
Lipstick, glass, of a face turned away ...considered dropping "of"; not sure whose face it is, so it didn't feel necessary. right now, I'm envisioning a reflection
Gritty, dirty surface of the pavement, gravel, you !
Collapses together, red handbag and shoulders and glasses and pavement...wasn't sure of the subject of "collapses." The "red...glasses" really is a great mix of singulars, plurals, and collectives in a sense (glasses being a singular object with two lenses, but also perhaps being multiple pairs of glasses)

Amber cast,
Many door-slams and stiletto-trots and screams, serve distant...I would have stopped after "stiletto-trots", losing also the "ambience" bit of the next line ambience
Amber hued door and bonnet, car spotlit on a stage casting Pavement
Inside lies solace, detachment: door a gateway to..."door" and gateway felt redundant to me
Nasal lens-tinting; a new world of actions done here....the second half of the line did little for me

White with black line, dress
A pretty face queuing on Pavement
Shoulders brush bony male shoulders, two cast together in a play
Docile, shuffles along, shoved, laughs hurled

(end)

the description is here, but I never felt focused on a specific scene or really felt sure of what I was supposed to imagine because the shifts are constant, as with the different nouns and verbs. I'm getting some kind of spectacle/ production, but am probably off-base.
I like the urban atmosphere the poem gives.
I hope some of this is helpful