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04-14-2012, 10:31 AM

Hi jmnical,
Welcome and glad to see you posting. I'm no expert, but I think you have a poem there Smile

This has a really good feeling to it with an obvious emotional connection. I did think you could have tightened it up a good bit (especially the overuse of pronouns, 'he', etc.) Of course that is just my opinion. Smile

Thanks for sharing.

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apology - by jmnical - 04-14-2012, 12:50 AM

RE: apology - by abu nuwas - 04-14-2012, 07:12 AM

RE: apology - by billy - 04-14-2012, 09:14 AM

RE: apology - by jmnical - 04-14-2012, 10:13 AM

RE: apology - by Wildcard - 04-14-2012, 10:31 AM

RE: apology - by Todd - 04-14-2012, 11:00 AM

RE: apology - by addy - 04-14-2012, 02:43 PM

RE: apology - by jmnical - 04-14-2012, 10:50 PM

RE: apology - by Todd - 04-15-2012, 03:09 AM

RE: apology - by Erthona - 04-17-2012, 02:07 PM

RE: apology - by billy - 04-17-2012, 05:07 PM

RE: apology - by jmnical - 04-18-2012, 10:00 AM

RE: apology - by billy - 04-18-2012, 10:12 AM

RE: apology - by Erthona - 04-19-2012, 12:22 AM

RE: apology - by Todd - 04-19-2012, 02:26 AM

RE: apology - by Erthona - 04-19-2012, 06:26 AM

RE: apology - by billy - 04-19-2012, 12:41 PM

RE: apology - by heslopian - 04-27-2012, 05:26 PM

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