Reunion
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(04-07-2012, 12:19 PM)Philatone Wrote:  Second pots of tea
sit heavier than first is the first needed?

in cups so porcelain, the handles
try to break,

untouched. We ran out of news
as water boiled, now

the taste won't leave.
A bitter leaf

has found my tongue
and shed a seed,

swelling without
a drop of sun to grow.
just the one nit. in the 2nd line.
i also liked the porcelain image of delicate Smile
nicely done
thanks for the read.
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Messages In This Thread
Reunion - by Philatone - 04-07-2012, 12:19 PM
RE: Reunion - by Todd - 04-07-2012, 12:26 PM
RE: Reunion - by Leanne - 04-07-2012, 02:32 PM
RE: Reunion - by Philatone - 04-07-2012, 11:06 PM
RE: Reunion - by billy - 04-08-2012, 12:02 PM
RE: Reunion - by Bronte - 04-08-2012, 03:31 PM
RE: Reunion - by Philatone - 04-13-2012, 01:32 PM
RE: Reunion - by addy - 04-13-2012, 05:50 PM



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