04-08-2012, 11:27 AM
i new it had something to do with easter? the nails gave it away 
i had to look up the title
fort some reason poems relating to religion make me feel queasy. while this one doesn't, i am having a twinge
i think i'm the same with the 9/11 stuff, and other similar things. having to read them seems to be a penance, not because i see them as bad poetry but i automatically think. oh no, not again. that said, i was force fed religion as a kid so i have somewhat of an aversion to it. if i didn't know it was about easter i'd have liked it more
that said, i do think it was well written. the edit feels a lot better, the changes in the 1st stanza feel stronger, i particularly think the 1st line has more strength and works the opening much better.
sorry for not getting to it sooner
i had to look up the title
fort some reason poems relating to religion make me feel queasy. while this one doesn't, i am having a twinge
i think i'm the same with the 9/11 stuff, and other similar things. having to read them seems to be a penance, not because i see them as bad poetry but i automatically think. oh no, not again. that said, i was force fed religion as a kid so i have somewhat of an aversion to it. if i didn't know it was about easter i'd have liked it more
that said, i do think it was well written. the edit feels a lot better, the changes in the 1st stanza feel stronger, i particularly think the 1st line has more strength and works the opening much better.
sorry for not getting to it sooner