04-07-2012, 07:57 AM
In the third stanza I think there should be a comma after "contract," seperating the sentence's clauses, as I kept picturing a contract stuffed into a wallet sleeve. Also, I'm guessing the bonds in the last verse are metaphorical, but they come across literally to me, so I keep thinking that this is some dark twist in which we realse that Buck is kidnapping people.
Other than those quibbles this is an impressive poem. The image of the wallet poking from Buck's pocket as he searches for change at a red light tells us a lot about him, which is a subtle way to paint his character. He's revealed entirely through his actions, not physical descriptions. Thanks for the read, Philatone.
Other than those quibbles this is an impressive poem. The image of the wallet poking from Buck's pocket as he searches for change at a red light tells us a lot about him, which is a subtle way to paint his character. He's revealed entirely through his actions, not physical descriptions. Thanks for the read, Philatone.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe