Time

[Erthona]

Ah Methuselah! A former student of mine. You know he drowned?
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Workshop all you want Leanne. I just put this here because I did not consider it worth the effort for people. I think all of your suggestion can be incorporated.
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Ed,

The meter? It is more or less iambic free verse, but certain patterns do develop and Leanne was correct in pointing that out.

It is true, (this should probably be "It's true")
wise men
have found,
that even (an assumed e'en)
when sated,
time contin-
ues to
wind down

probably should be

time still
winds down


I think I tried using "continue" as a way of slowing it down at the end to mimic the content.

Thanks for the comments everyone.

Dale

PS If anyone ever feels like making in depth comments, regardless of where I post something feel free.