03-23-2012, 12:10 PM
(03-23-2012, 05:25 AM)Philatone Wrote: If the dog were less stubbornnothing to really give constructive feedback on for me except to say the piece works, the dog man relationship is shown fully and lovingly.
he, too, would survive
hours of inattention,
a few days without a cup of food
rolled into a bowel,
a week of play
without the trouble of sleep
or the guided tours of the block is 'the' needed
with their pauses at the stop sign.
I think we need batteries
for the heap nestled at my feet, panting; love this couplet
an adapter to plug him into the wall,
remove for some company on the porch
and charge at night.
Sometimes, he could be left alone
all weekend without having to worry
about bathroom breaks, restless legs
and how the house will change
with bite marks on the couch,
an odor in the bedroom 'odor' is that the yankee spelling?
and a set of teeth at the door, hehe, i know it's not constructive but it was a funny line
begging for an answer.
thanks for the read
