03-21-2012, 10:16 PM
A doily...no, I think a "silk kerchief". One sets one's drink upon a doily, or covers the end of a padded chair arm with one.
Personally I'd go with "assiduous" instead of "sedulous" for the alliteration with "aesthetic". Definitely drop the "full".
Also, purely personal I'd go with either "he" or "Gray" instead of "Dorian Gray" in L2.
Possibly "framed" instead of "posed" in L4.
Regardless, a nice and clever poem.
Dale
Personally I'd go with "assiduous" instead of "sedulous" for the alliteration with "aesthetic". Definitely drop the "full".
Also, purely personal I'd go with either "he" or "Gray" instead of "Dorian Gray" in L2.
Possibly "framed" instead of "posed" in L4.
Regardless, a nice and clever poem.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.