02-21-2010, 07:23 PM
It is very hard to comment. I really like it.
I would perhaps change some of the words on the second stanza. I wouldn't use "fuse" to describe the melding of smells (to me fuse sounds too solid, but that could be just personal preference) and I don't think beer really "coalesces".
Wonderful read as always
I would perhaps change some of the words on the second stanza. I wouldn't use "fuse" to describe the melding of smells (to me fuse sounds too solid, but that could be just personal preference) and I don't think beer really "coalesces".
Wonderful read as always
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?