Hai kuckoo

[tectak]

Fun is very serious business you know -- it's just harder to critique, because nobody wants to spoil the moment.

Nor do I.

(Except... "squeasing"???)

So, you're a bit hai-curious are you? I'd never mention the word "tanka"...

My favourite is L8, with its very un-Japanese alliteration and enjambment (if it were in line fragments, that is) -- but it's such a lovely image, fully encapsulated in just a few words.

This is most enjoyable.

Squeasing error : error error error : now appeeezing

Thanks leanne : welcome back : tectak

Enough already

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All serious poetry should be in fun and misc.
Critique categories are (don't tell anyone): strictly for socializing.

1. 5-7-5 is insectoid.
2. Really love 1,2,3,10
3. i(I) resemble 4
4. All seriousness aside, these/this are/is quiet wonderful.

Ray


Old pond ; spring jumps in : sound of frogs

Not that keen on Haiku but it sure is an easy way to make a living. ....and I am right with you on the 575. Its mine now, I tell you. All mine!
Best,
Tectak