03-09-2012, 08:37 AM
I can't deny that I at least derived from tectak's comment that he doesn't like my closing line, which is feedback in itself. My problem was that his comment seemed less like advice and more like a demand.
Summation lines are my heroin. I've been struggling with them for years. I hate them in other people's poems, but when it comes to my own I often find it hard to not wrap them in a pretty pink bow at the end.
I will remove the closing line. Thanks, Ray. I didn't even consciously register that the closing line was a summation until I read your comment
Summation lines are my heroin. I've been struggling with them for years. I hate them in other people's poems, but when it comes to my own I often find it hard to not wrap them in a pretty pink bow at the end.
I will remove the closing line. Thanks, Ray. I didn't even consciously register that the closing line was a summation until I read your comment
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe