03-05-2012, 01:44 AM
I like how this comes across as a string of images conveying a larger picture. It's lyrical and oddly moving. The way you characterise the houses as lending life to the town is interesting. A couple of nits: I don't think L2 needs a comma, and L9's archaic "thy" seems pointless, as the rest of the poem doesn't use such language.
JMHO of course. Thanks for the read.
JMHO of course. Thanks for the read.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe