02-25-2012, 01:18 PM
In stanza three, why not repeat 'she went'? Every other part is repeated, but there you go with 'and' . . . I have to think that you did it by design because your wording and punctuation are always very careful . . . was it the 'sh' sounds?
Then another thing I noticed and correct me if I'm wrong, but I thought with 'and' you didn't need a comma:
She went and went and went.
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And will and will and will.
Then another thing I noticed and correct me if I'm wrong, but I thought with 'and' you didn't need a comma:
She went and went and went.
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And will and will and will.