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[Leanne]

Here's why this works for me: folk music.

Repetition is reinforcement. Poetry like this doesn't need elaborate metaphors, it needs good strong sonics and a soothing rhythm to emphasise the nostalgic, yearning nature of the story itself. I get the picture of a small town woman, dreaming of far-off places but bound by love and duty to the place she's in. "and sky, and sky, and sky" is particularly effective because it shows the enormity of possibility, then is grounded by "she loves her home". I would be tempted to use "she went, she went, she went" instead of "and" in S3.

Poetry need not be grand phrasing and monumental themes -- a simple tale told simply and well will do the trick.