Song of the Reluctant Nihilist

[Philatone]

hey!
some thoughts

I might have been a thousand souls,
more and less in touch with God,
treading the canyons of good and despair. ..reminiscent of those biblical valleys
How simple and how beautiful existence would appear
in the light of moral clarity,
knowing if pain or empathy your heart beats to evoke ..I think you capture the question here, though it did strike me as slightly direct. for a piece like this, perhaps that works best.
I am lost in the woods of the human spirit ...i like the connection of man to nature in this line.

I would have liked to inhabit the bones
of a God-fearing woman, hermetic and chaste, ..."hermetic and chaste" didn't do much for me; I think removing them would also allow the reader to focus on these images which are pretty strong, and to do so more rapidly
tending her roses and reading her psalms,
her vaginal leaves dying in synch
with those which fill the golden urns
guarding Yahweh's door.

I could have lived with wickedness,
the dirges of hurt, the marches of hate
elicited from metal harps
inside my godless hands. ...I'm seeing a lot of a single word in this piece (god); of course, up to you to determine if that is appropriate, again considering the topic
A swamp in the place of my soul,
yielding naught but skeletons. ...could be trimmed to just "yielding skeletons"

Instead I linger here with you,
my anonymous priest,
sculpting my flesh into verse.
I try to seed the barren sky,
and speak with He who isn't there.

pretty strong close. again, a lot of the comments are just personal preferences; I'm sure you'll make the best decision as to leave or adjust