the edit feels to me to have a more direct line from a to b.
that first line now sets the scene. it's all about you...not him. everything else you wrote in the edit now fits into place.
i was presuming dad was physically dead, (suicided even)
nice edit phil.
it's actually geoff isn't it
that first line now sets the scene. it's all about you...not him. everything else you wrote in the edit now fits into place.
i was presuming dad was physically dead, (suicided even)
nice edit phil.
it's actually geoff isn't it