02-08-2012, 03:57 PM
See, I still read that as I would, that line strikes me as odd. In that way you are describing how he received what she did, not what she did.
Leanne,
I don't think it is semantics, but rather the detrimental effect uncommon word usage. I can understand what she is trying to say, as I believe most people would. What I am saying is that it takes the mind more time to parse through an unfamiliar usage or application of a word causing a slight disruption in the consciousness of the reader. So this is about the disruption it will cause in the reading, not about the ultimate interpretation failing. You can see it easily enough in dance although most people would not be able to determine the cause, when two people are doing the exact same moves and yet one is "graceful" and the other is not. The graceful comes form the attention to the generally unconscious things in a poem that still effect the reading. Fred Astaire was a master of this. However there are obvious things one can say about him, such as his balance is always perfect, which can be seen in his posture. It is this attention to detail in any art form that is the difference between a master and a journeyman. If you remember we went over this aspect on David's poem, and how he was portraying the candle. Several people agree that it was somehow off, but we couldn't figure out how. The problem was actually in an article used in relation to candle I believe. It was either the problem of using a direct article when an indirect was needed or vice versa.
Dale
Leanne,
I don't think it is semantics, but rather the detrimental effect uncommon word usage. I can understand what she is trying to say, as I believe most people would. What I am saying is that it takes the mind more time to parse through an unfamiliar usage or application of a word causing a slight disruption in the consciousness of the reader. So this is about the disruption it will cause in the reading, not about the ultimate interpretation failing. You can see it easily enough in dance although most people would not be able to determine the cause, when two people are doing the exact same moves and yet one is "graceful" and the other is not. The graceful comes form the attention to the generally unconscious things in a poem that still effect the reading. Fred Astaire was a master of this. However there are obvious things one can say about him, such as his balance is always perfect, which can be seen in his posture. It is this attention to detail in any art form that is the difference between a master and a journeyman. If you remember we went over this aspect on David's poem, and how he was portraying the candle. Several people agree that it was somehow off, but we couldn't figure out how. The problem was actually in an article used in relation to candle I believe. It was either the problem of using a direct article when an indirect was needed or vice versa.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.