Barabbas
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(12-19-2011, 04:00 PM)bogpan Wrote:  Where are my hands?
Where are they?
They're reaching for dark
chests.
And somebody is giggling.
Barabbas!
And my backbone is
squeezing.
I can't breath.
Take them.

The Three Wise Men passed
by
(without stopping)
after a long star.
On the hill
there was a town.


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Merry New Year and Christmas light at all.
Thank you for your congratulations on my birthday and especially Billy.
and to you Smile

the last verse worked well. it feels a bit out of time with first though as barabbas came 30 odd years later. maybe if the stanza were reversed it would make a difference. jmo.

i did get that votes to free barabbas were paid for, and that for pilot and others hands were tied, if that was your insight.
thanks for the read.

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Messages In This Thread
Barabbas - by bogpan - 12-19-2011, 04:00 PM
RE: Barabbas - by Wildcard - 12-20-2011, 12:09 AM
RE: Barabbas - by bogpan - 12-21-2011, 04:25 AM
RE: Barabbas - by grannyjill - 12-20-2011, 01:07 AM
RE: Barabbas - by Philatone - 12-20-2011, 02:00 PM
RE: Barabbas - by Erthona - 12-20-2011, 09:45 PM
RE: Barabbas - by billy - 12-23-2011, 01:29 AM
RE: Barabbas - by bogpan - 12-23-2011, 04:53 PM
RE: Barabbas - by Wildcard - 12-24-2011, 02:36 AM
RE: Barabbas - by bogpan - 12-28-2011, 04:20 PM



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