12-20-2011, 02:20 PM
Aish--thanks for the critical yet supportive feedback. agreed with a number of the points you raised. I'm hesitant to add a question mark for fear of disrupting the transition to the last stanza (which I intend to leave for the moment but am certainly considering your suggestion)/
granny- glad you like the revision! also, am glad to have inspired something, however unintentionally; may it take you somewhere wonderful and if it doesn't...you can blame me
granny- glad you like the revision! also, am glad to have inspired something, however unintentionally; may it take you somewhere wonderful and if it doesn't...you can blame me
Written only for you to consider.