From Santa
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Erthona Wrote:. . . Bottom of tag, or did you mean tag on the bottom of the present. I didn't know tags had bottoms Smile
Anything with text on it has a bottom and a top. Big Grin The bottom is where you write 'To: xxxx'

(12-18-2011, 10:41 AM)Philatone Wrote:  Wrapping presents
once the house has set
to sleep, it is not so hard
to be a thief;

a stereo to drown
creaks of paper
pressed to squares, --nicely put, imo. Very visual and not the same old way of putting it
the opening of a downstairs drawer
for tape, the rummage for a bow.

Not even a shadow leaks --again, I like the way you've made a nice image and stayed away from overused wording
from any bedroom door
from the murmurs of the stairs,
swipes of scissors, --what about 'snips' instead of swipes? I think of credit cards, wash clothes and chalkboard erasers when I read 'swipes'
marches to a dying tree

where tomorrow it will not matter
how your gift
wandered into the morning,

or that the name
on the bottom
of the tag
is wrong.
Great close. Not only is it funny, it encapsulates the frantic energy of the holidays. Thanks for sharing.
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From Santa - by Philatone - 12-18-2011, 10:41 AM
RE: From Santa - by popeye - 12-18-2011, 11:56 AM
RE: From Santa - by billy - 12-18-2011, 09:24 PM
RE: From Santa - by Erthona - 12-19-2011, 12:25 AM
RE: From Santa - by Wildcard - 12-19-2011, 05:01 AM
RE: From Santa - by Philatone - 12-19-2011, 09:44 AM
RE: From Santa - by Leanne - 12-19-2011, 03:37 PM
RE: From Santa - by grannyjill - 12-20-2011, 04:48 PM
RE: From Santa - by Philatone - 12-29-2011, 05:57 AM
RE: From Santa - by Erthona - 01-01-2012, 04:00 PM



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