sound of crunching

sound of crunching

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12-16-2011, 08:07 PM

matsuo basho wrote one without the fish;

old pond;
frog jumps in —
sound of water.

i think i prefer yours. (is it's needed on the last line)

i think titles are a cheat but not with this one, it adds that extra dimension.

nicely done.

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sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 12-16-2011, 02:35 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by billy - 12-16-2011, 08:07 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 12-16-2011, 08:38 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by billy - 12-16-2011, 08:42 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 12-17-2011, 12:07 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by billy - 12-17-2011, 01:02 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 12-17-2011, 01:14 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by billy - 12-17-2011, 01:21 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by billy - 12-17-2011, 01:22 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by billy - 12-17-2011, 01:23 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Aish - 12-17-2011, 04:17 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 12-17-2011, 07:41 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by billy - 12-17-2011, 07:49 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 12-17-2011, 08:22 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by billy - 12-17-2011, 08:53 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-01-2012, 03:22 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-04-2012, 07:27 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-04-2012, 07:48 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-04-2012, 09:03 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-04-2012, 09:46 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-04-2012, 11:51 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-05-2012, 05:29 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-05-2012, 02:37 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-07-2012, 01:32 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-07-2012, 01:51 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-07-2012, 03:12 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by billy - 01-07-2012, 03:41 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-07-2012, 12:08 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-07-2012, 12:33 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-08-2012, 03:22 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-09-2012, 04:34 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-09-2012, 08:00 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-09-2012, 09:30 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-09-2012, 10:31 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-09-2012, 10:52 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-09-2012, 11:05 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-09-2012, 11:20 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-10-2012, 02:22 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-10-2012, 07:02 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-11-2012, 02:31 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-11-2012, 03:03 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-11-2012, 11:02 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-14-2012, 12:49 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-14-2012, 12:56 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by billy - 01-14-2012, 03:00 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-14-2012, 05:05 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-14-2012, 05:12 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-14-2012, 05:22 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-14-2012, 12:08 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-23-2012, 11:46 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-24-2012, 11:39 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-24-2012, 02:30 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-24-2012, 09:37 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by billy - 01-24-2012, 10:54 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-25-2012, 01:05 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-25-2012, 08:37 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by srijantje - 01-25-2012, 03:03 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Leanne - 01-25-2012, 05:18 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by popeye - 01-25-2012, 05:32 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by Leanne - 01-25-2012, 05:35 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by srijantje - 01-25-2012, 06:20 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by popeye - 01-25-2012, 07:15 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 01-26-2012, 04:10 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Wildcard - 01-26-2012, 07:43 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by Erthona - 01-26-2012, 02:29 PM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 02-29-2012, 05:51 AM

RE: sound of crunching - by rayheinrich - 03-13-2012, 07:27 AM

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