12-15-2011, 07:51 AM
sorry, returning late.
with regards to S2, I would prefer the original. I get wary in rhymes that start with "now", I feel a lot of times they can end up feeling forced. maybe something more like "where now not one tree sways" or something to that extent
with regards to S2, I would prefer the original. I get wary in rhymes that start with "now", I feel a lot of times they can end up feeling forced. maybe something more like "where now not one tree sways" or something to that extent
Written only for you to consider.