12-12-2011, 12:26 AM
Crikey - this didn't take you long. This is a good write and as Erthona says the shifts in the poems meter don't cause any problems. There are some nice touches in most of the verses. I like gargoyle cry (but with TO make...) and stained glass window pray. I don't think you can rhyme 'stood' with 'blood' though, and I agree with you re: fizz
My original remark was driven by the very end of your 'speech' something like this -
Poetry
creativity
imagination
passion
logic and chaos
and all emotions
and an ability to transfer them
into a poem.
Poetry is nothing and everything.
It is creation.
It is a smile from god or
a scowl from hell.
Poetry is the end of your nib,
quill,
stick in the sand,
stroke of a paint brush or curve of
an original breast.
poetry
just
is.
Rewritten by you (well, you did write it!) You will have two successes on your hands.
My original remark was driven by the very end of your 'speech' something like this -
Poetry
creativity
imagination
passion
logic and chaos
and all emotions
and an ability to transfer them
into a poem.
Poetry is nothing and everything.
It is creation.
It is a smile from god or
a scowl from hell.
Poetry is the end of your nib,
quill,
stick in the sand,
stroke of a paint brush or curve of
an original breast.
poetry
just
is.
Rewritten by you (well, you did write it!) You will have two successes on your hands.