12-11-2011, 07:50 PM
it feels snow whitish or some other princess type of waiting poem.
i like the enjambment, and reflecting on it's own line.
the sonics are very good and it's easy to read. i'm not sure as i have any constructive feedback to give.
if novice poets could put together a poem like this i don't think i'd call them novice.
i'm not sure the last two lines add anything to the poem. for me they temper the sadness too much.
good write granny. jmo
i like the enjambment, and reflecting on it's own line.
the sonics are very good and it's easy to read. i'm not sure as i have any constructive feedback to give.
if novice poets could put together a poem like this i don't think i'd call them novice.
i'm not sure the last two lines add anything to the poem. for me they temper the sadness too much.
good write granny. jmo