12-11-2011, 02:35 PM
Thanks for your feedback, Billy and Erthona
Are you suggesting I make the opening two verses more objective, Billy? Remove any hint of personal perspective and make them more matter-of-fact?
My grasp of dependant clauses has always been somewhat shaky - I often use individual sentences to seperate them - so thanks for your help regarding those, Erthona.
Are you suggesting I make the opening two verses more objective, Billy? Remove any hint of personal perspective and make them more matter-of-fact?
My grasp of dependant clauses has always been somewhat shaky - I often use individual sentences to seperate them - so thanks for your help regarding those, Erthona.
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