12-07-2011, 01:06 PM
Liked the poem (ok, maybe not "bully-boy seas").
I especially liked the restaurants. It definitely contains
enough imagery to escape "telly". Personally, I think "telly"
ain't that bad. Writers that get caught up in the "show,
don't tell" thing often end up sounding like salesmen.
Telling imparts an intimacy that showing can't.
all this useless beauty... but what the hell, why not?