11-29-2011, 05:04 AM
Philatone, you must stop apologising -- any feedback is helpful, yours especially so. The last lines of the stanzas are the ones that gave me the most trouble and I keep changing them. In S2, what would you think of "now silence fills its days"?
Bodb Derg is trickier -- he was said to be a great storyteller, and his audience would be held captivated by the shine of his silver sandals as he walked up and down, never disturbing the grass. But I always assume that everyone else knows what I'm talking about! On reflection, it does probably seem weird to put shoes in the same category as harps and tongues. I must ruminate
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Jill, thank you -- I always get a little jealous when reading about how revered and important the bard/poet was to elder societies, especially when I look at my bank balance!
Bodb Derg is trickier -- he was said to be a great storyteller, and his audience would be held captivated by the shine of his silver sandals as he walked up and down, never disturbing the grass. But I always assume that everyone else knows what I'm talking about! On reflection, it does probably seem weird to put shoes in the same category as harps and tongues. I must ruminate
.Jill, thank you -- I always get a little jealous when reading about how revered and important the bard/poet was to elder societies, especially when I look at my bank balance!
It could be worse