We Were Strangers? (Double Etheree)

[grannyjill]

How about "the trip for him was ended" or some such in L10? All things considered, I think this is a fine use of the form (and I'm pleased to see that, contrary to the "rules", you've managed to sneak in a few light rhymes). I very much like the eloquent simplicity of "too late now for Earl Grey and sympathy", that line alone speaks volumes.

"Suicide. His journey now was ended" ..........I like your idea very much but 'trip' sounds too....flippant(?). I realise that 'now' is obviously a filler word, but I need it for the rhythm. (Edit, I may need a rethink since I see I've used 'now' in the Earl Grey line too)

....I have a problem with rhyming....it gets into everything I write, despite my best efforts. (see? 'write' 'despite'...damn)

I didn't think much of etherees until I wrote this....I'm going to post another one which worked out quite well.

Thanks for input.