Interesting piece. I'd have to agree with the others that some of the grammar needs brushing up, just to make it clearer (it took a couple of re-reads to decipher L3-5)... I can't quite put my finger on it, but for some reason the lines before L6 reads as oddly static, and a little perfunctory. Maybe if you changed the tense ("mortifies" to "mortified", etc...), only because many children's stories are written in the simple past, "-ed" tense. Just a thought, though. 
Also, maybe change "stoic", as stoic by definition contradicts the bunny being mortified.
Also, maybe change "stoic", as stoic by definition contradicts the bunny being mortified.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?