Once In a While Meltdown

[Philatone]

yo mark
wanted to share what thoughts I had

unclear offense
as if it mattered
a nervous predator
mortifies a stoic little bunny ..just wanted to be sure that "mortifies" was the word you wanted here
then loses her mind into the bedroom..same thing with "into". seemed like a peculiar choice for me
behind the oak...great use of "oak" here
and dull brass hinges..just a suggestion here, but i think changing "dull" to "dulled" would add energy, history, and character. fine as is too!
a tiny plea melts ...played with moving "melts" to the next line. great word to use
to a wracking soundtrack..."wracking" interested me...not sure how I feel about it
of ignorant throbs..why ignorant?
back against the door
weeping for mother
and me

sorry about all my nits on word choice! entirely possible I'm missing something huge and everything makes perfect sense with a few more reads. like the momentum of the last three lines. may come back later to add some more. thanks mark!