Divine Tracks:
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(10-22-2011, 06:08 PM)billy Wrote:  removed usually from beginning of L1, and male from L5, after name. (thanks addy.)

indigo or red:
at the moment I’m emitting pastel green,
thinking of tripe and the birdy song.
Jesus, a sunbeam, and sugar dummies;


Hispanics name offspring after Him
and pronounce their mule… hey soose

Gods burnt remains in silver foil; Is "Gods" meant in the possessive context, like the burnt remains of God? If so there should be an apostrophe before the "s".
basted like a Sunday roast,
the twenty two cc syringe
laid out for discerning followers.
After tasting; wallowing in the gravy of grief
international force feeding
via the media kitchen of bad taste
so many dead

and me

me
I’m pastel green
Some of the images here are fantastic. You capture the Hispanic community really well, playing on their customs without sounding condescending or even God-forbid racist. As I don't watch the news or read other people's comments before posting my own I feel like I'm missing what the poem is about, but the crisp use of image and colours makes this a great read regardless.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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Messages In This Thread
Divine Tracks: - by billy - 10-22-2011, 06:08 PM
RE: Divine Tracks: - by Aish - 10-22-2011, 06:22 PM
RE: Divine Tracks: - by addy - 10-24-2011, 10:00 AM
RE: Divine Tracks: - by billy - 10-24-2011, 12:19 PM
RE: Divine Tracks: - by Ca ne fait rien - 11-01-2011, 07:02 AM
RE: Divine Tracks: - by heslopian - 11-01-2011, 11:26 AM
RE: Divine Tracks: - by billy - 11-01-2011, 04:49 PM
RE: Divine Tracks: - by heslopian - 11-02-2011, 03:50 AM
RE: Divine Tracks: - by Philatone - 11-02-2011, 05:06 AM
RE: Divine Tracks: - by billy - 11-03-2011, 06:32 AM



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