10-30-2011, 09:19 PM
Ugh! But he was a bit of a wimp, really-- surely a Real Hard-boiled Man would not have had to ask his 'wench' to let him go out! Good colorful narrative, Jill -- but I thought it would all be alright! I wondered if you were not tempted to re-cast into someting metrical? But very evocative language. Well done!