10-28-2011, 08:41 AM
why the ampersands?
i want to re write it and i don't.
love the first line. like the idea that a libertine would want to see what eternity was
because they'd tried everything else. after a few reads, what doesn't work for me are the &'s and the caps.
if you use grammar i think you should use it properly (of course that.s just me, but if you use a period why not use a cap after it, what's the reason behind such a thing?
other than that, i like it a lot. jmo
thanks for the read.
i want to re write it and i don't.
love the first line. like the idea that a libertine would want to see what eternity was
because they'd tried everything else. after a few reads, what doesn't work for me are the &'s and the caps.
if you use grammar i think you should use it properly (of course that.s just me, but if you use a period why not use a cap after it, what's the reason behind such a thing?
other than that, i like it a lot. jmo
thanks for the read.