Night sky:

[Wildcard]

Hi Billy,
   For a starter poem, this is really good. Not the best to critique it, but I'll give it go anyway:

Flight of star shine holds my gaze --shouldn't it be 'star-shine'? it seems you are using it that way'
shimmering in a black back-drop, of velvet softness [b]--'velvet' has been done to death with the night sky (and I've just started reading poetry :p) what about something more originally soft? JMO -- I love black back-drop
myriad yet singular in awesome dynasty

ruling night heavens with majestic charm --great line. love 'majestic charm'; not the shameless quile, but the classy woo
lending passion, giving evocation to
soul and thoughts of man on tranquil nights

ever present light of distant pasts
guiding future with eternal illumination
as we, ponder self and unanswered questions

stars; essence of what we are
beauty of what we can achieve
reflection of ourselves in the universal mirror

their brilliance, brought to life by our existence
in their brilliance
we shine with definition

The last stanza is a weak, though I like the thought. The repetition of 'brilliance' hurts it IMO. How about somethings like (though obviously not)

brilliance, quickened by our essense,
highlights our individuality

. . . or not. Like I said just trying to be helpful