10-17-2011, 12:16 PM
Thanks for the feedback, Bilbo
I don't know what word I could replace "suicide" with, but I'll have a think about it. What makes you lean towards hate? Does the poem come across as self-pitying or arrogant? I worried about that with the silent grooves line and the Biblical references.
I don't know what word I could replace "suicide" with, but I'll have a think about it. What makes you lean towards hate? Does the poem come across as self-pitying or arrogant? I worried about that with the silent grooves line and the Biblical references.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe