10-17-2011, 12:06 PM
i'm not sure if i love it or hate it hehe.
the last line is magical. and so is the title.
okay the 1st stanza is wicked and i love it.
the 2nd stanza while okay feels a little less, i think if "suicide" weren't there it would be a "love the 2nd" also.
the silent grooves line is impeccable
aprt from the one niggle i can';t see as how i'd alter any of it constructively speaking. i had a falter between the 2nd and 3rd verse
but it wasn't harsh. i think i'll go with really like
thanks for the read
the last line is magical. and so is the title.
okay the 1st stanza is wicked and i love it.
the 2nd stanza while okay feels a little less, i think if "suicide" weren't there it would be a "love the 2nd" also.
the silent grooves line is impeccable
aprt from the one niggle i can';t see as how i'd alter any of it constructively speaking. i had a falter between the 2nd and 3rd verse
but it wasn't harsh. i think i'll go with really like
thanks for the read