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***(I write)
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10-14-2011, 11:24 PM
Great job, bogpan. I don't have a lot to say critically as I love your choice of language. 'collecting colorful rains', 'cloth to bandage the light' and the last two lines are marvelous (imo). As far as the 'which'es, I liked the last one, but thought the first one should be cut or replaced with 'that'. Thanks for sharing.
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***(I write) - by bogpan - 10-14-2011, 03:21 PM
RE: ***(I write) - by billy - 10-14-2011, 08:10 PM
RE: ***(I write) - by bogpan - 10-18-2011, 03:21 PM
RE: ***(I write) - by Wildcard - 10-14-2011, 11:24 PM
RE: ***(I write) - by Philatone - 10-15-2011, 06:35 AM
RE: ***(I write) - by addy - 10-15-2011, 02:56 PM
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