the college trees

[Philatone]

row by row these saplings reach for what the clouds possess, --i wonder how necessary "row...these" is, starting instead with "saplings." I could argue for them --the rows of trees mirroring the rows of lines of a poem, among others-- but it does seem to stall the scene a bit for me
shedding autumn leaves like crumbs. weaving through them students flock
in groups to bus shelters. some barks are thin as catwalk girls, --great placement of the students, literally weaving them between the descriptions of the trees. agree with billy on the "in groups"
others full-figured, but all unite in nakedness, I think you can find a stronger description than "full-figured". the word "nakedness" really stands out, but I'm not sure about it
male fingers of the sky unbuttoning each dress. interesting use of gender. as whole, I like the line

day flits between elysian light and geriatric brows,
grey clouds making cameos. perching in the bare branches, ---and they do make cameos, as in this poem. But I'm not sure if this is just nice to add or a new element for the whole poem.
like stuffed birds nailed there, are dormitory windows. --"stuffed" feels a little unnecessary with "nailed" for me. I like the idea of turning windows into birds
new leaves will obscure this view come the promised year,
humanity's dusk, which even college trees must dread. --strong finish

hope this is helpful and makes sense!