the college trees

[billy]

row by row these saplings reach for what the clouds possess, is "these" needed
shedding autumn leaves like crumbs. weaving through them students flock does it need a comma after them?
in groups to bus shelters. some barks are thin as catwalk girls, in groups feels redundant
others full-figured, but all unite in nakedness,
male fingers of the sky unbuttoning each dress.

day flits between elysian light and geriatric brows,
grey clouds making cameos. perching in the bare branches,
like stuffed birds nailed there, are dormitory windows.
new leaves will obscure this view come the promised year,
humanity's dusk, which even college trees must dread.

i think the last verse has too much going on (i do like the geriatric brows)
but i'm already assuming the branches are bare, 'nailed there' feels like the too busy part, and 'this view'. the last line takes away from being observational which for me was the best of poem. jmo.

thanks for the read