02-17-2010, 09:42 AM
I don't really like this poem, I think it's one of my worst ones. But, what the heck, every poem has some type of hope. It was post to be based on a best friend I had, which I was jealous of. I would like to fix it up and make it much better than what it is now. Thanks guys.
She
The warmth of her smile,
upsurge the envy in my heart,
her success brought tears to my eyes,
animosity hurtled through my bones,
insecurities gnawing my soul,
She had a solid esteem,
while, I felt hollow in my stomach,
She had everything I craved,
I tried to become her
but, fell flat on my face,
time wasted focusing on her,
a jaded look upon my face,
each observations caused more troubles,
Hatred I felt within the flesh,
She had the most I wanted
Self-Esteem.
She
The warmth of her smile,
upsurge the envy in my heart,
her success brought tears to my eyes,
animosity hurtled through my bones,
insecurities gnawing my soul,
She had a solid esteem,
while, I felt hollow in my stomach,
She had everything I craved,
I tried to become her
but, fell flat on my face,
time wasted focusing on her,
a jaded look upon my face,
each observations caused more troubles,
Hatred I felt within the flesh,
She had the most I wanted
Self-Esteem.

