10-11-2011, 12:28 PM
I agree, I love the result of the edits 
: lots of little things, but the end result makes a big difference. I think the only thing I could suggest in final is to re-add a time context to the first stanza, so something like: "On days when flower boxes bloom// Between my neighbor's shutters"... but really that's a nit. Very nice job Philatone
: lots of little things, but the end result makes a big difference. I think the only thing I could suggest in final is to re-add a time context to the first stanza, so something like: "On days when flower boxes bloom// Between my neighbor's shutters"... but really that's a nit. Very nice job Philatone
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?