Daytime Drama

[Philatone]

one-legged hop
into drip-dried Levi's
tacky headbanger hairdos
antagonized by tugged t-shirts
sock-less feet stuffed into unlaced shoes
silent smiles shared

last glance at the lonely stream
once churning with giggles and sun fire,
courses darker now ---I stopped at this line. I think I would prefer the adverb at the start, to get "now courses darker"- the /o/ sounds of work well together. it also would help the flow syntactically for me, it makes the missing subject of "courses" in that line a less noticeable. should it be "more darkly"? .
as light abandons --it? or maybe "leaves" for "abandons"?
to flirt with blushing clouds.

i might have gotten caught too much in grammar; if so, take what you want. I wonder if you need punctuation in the second stanza if it wasn't in the first. I think you still have an alright piece right here, nice work.