To a Poet

[billy]

it looke wildly better for me. i could make a suggestion. you changed the title to jealousy and i admit it work, it's one of those power words.
but on line two you use it again. would a simple "it" suffice.


i think it's a great edit. the parts you removed strengthen the poem i think.

i get that you can't give a poets name but you could allude to one

were i under milkwood,

could i ask "If"

to write of "-----" in a sonnet

depending on who the poet is

either way, it's really getting there i think