10-07-2011, 03:10 AM
It grieves me to see people not giving a proper crit, it truly does! 
My own thoughts: I read it three or four times, each time being tripped up because I was trying to make it go, first like 'Good-bye Winter/The days are getting longer/Tea-leaf in a tea-cup/Is herald of a stranger', by Louis MacNeice I think, or Masefield's famous 'Quinquereme of Nineveh'.
Then I did my best with a Yorkshire accent, and found that whereas previously I had coninually been wanting to insert an extra syllable (like 'the'). now it came right because, in truth, before almost all the nouns, I was putting a ' t' ', just enough of a syllable to make it OK.
I also wondered about 'pinches', though.
Nice to see a salute to the mill-workers of old--- and confirmation of the adage 'Ministers' sons are sons o' guns'.
My own thoughts: I read it three or four times, each time being tripped up because I was trying to make it go, first like 'Good-bye Winter/The days are getting longer/Tea-leaf in a tea-cup/Is herald of a stranger', by Louis MacNeice I think, or Masefield's famous 'Quinquereme of Nineveh'.
Then I did my best with a Yorkshire accent, and found that whereas previously I had coninually been wanting to insert an extra syllable (like 'the'). now it came right because, in truth, before almost all the nouns, I was putting a ' t' ', just enough of a syllable to make it OK.
I also wondered about 'pinches', though.
Nice to see a salute to the mill-workers of old--- and confirmation of the adage 'Ministers' sons are sons o' guns'.