The Middle

[Leanne]

Well, I'd have to say it's a pretty effective style and your images are very clear -- some brilliant phrases here, like "swelled in sepia" (though I don't think you need "golden and browns" after it, the image is complete without that line), "so thick it's slurping", "flowing in their own decadence". Occasionally you have a word or two too many; there's the line I mentioned, as well as "shimmering and glistening" (pick one or the other, they're too similar in meaning to bother with both). I also don't think you need "but" in the last line.

I only have very small suggestions, as you can see -- I think it's a fine poem.