10-05-2011, 11:14 AM
a new word for me. "skirl" i had to look it up.
the 1st verse is one long image.
love the "t'boss" dialect
the 2nd verse continues with solid imagery.
and the last line is for me almost perfect, though i can't find a fault with it.
i know some poet use the minimum of grammar as you did with this stef, and i think with the right enjambment it works well.
i just wonder if grammar would have added something else to an already great little yorkshire poem.
but it is just a thought, nothing constructive to add apart from that. i did so enjoy the originality of the piece.
(jmo)
thanks for the read.
the 1st verse is one long image.
love the "t'boss" dialect
the 2nd verse continues with solid imagery.
and the last line is for me almost perfect, though i can't find a fault with it.
i know some poet use the minimum of grammar as you did with this stef, and i think with the right enjambment it works well.
i just wonder if grammar would have added something else to an already great little yorkshire poem.
but it is just a thought, nothing constructive to add apart from that. i did so enjoy the originality of the piece.
(jmo)
thanks for the read.