10-04-2011, 06:27 PM
I really like the seemingly random and everyday sort of descriptors, like 'red purse' , 'straw basket', juxtaposed with the (for wnat of a better word) synathaesia of
"A scar,
It fastens
Onto the cadence
Of your voice,"
and
"
A bucket,
It draws embers
From the bottom of its well."
Semantics. For some things in life, they just don't work. That is why we have poetry, and for this reader, this is poetry. I wish I had more time right now to do a proper crit, but just wanted to say something, I enjoyed so much.
"A scar,
It fastens
Onto the cadence
Of your voice,"
and
"
A bucket,
It draws embers
From the bottom of its well."
Semantics. For some things in life, they just don't work. That is why we have poetry, and for this reader, this is poetry. I wish I had more time right now to do a proper crit, but just wanted to say something, I enjoyed so much.