10-04-2011, 12:29 AM
Hi abu,
Simply stated: I like it, as is. At first I kept wanting to change L2, but the more I read it, the more I liked it. And then I considered Jack's rewrite of L3, but in the end I think the longer line is appropriate as it expedites the rythym to a punch-line close. Well done and thanks for sharing.
Simply stated: I like it, as is. At first I kept wanting to change L2, but the more I read it, the more I liked it. And then I considered Jack's rewrite of L3, but in the end I think the longer line is appropriate as it expedites the rythym to a punch-line close. Well done and thanks for sharing.