10-03-2011, 05:54 PM
i know it's not a humorous poem jack but the last verse made smile, knowing that the
first thing the 1st person would do after sex, would be to write a poem about it, no matter what promise the poet made
the last verse makes the poem for me. would "those colder" read better as "these colder"?
after a few reads i can't see has to how i would change anything but the tense nit.
thanks for the read jack.
first thing the 1st person would do after sex, would be to write a poem about it, no matter what promise the poet made
the last verse makes the poem for me. would "those colder" read better as "these colder"?
after a few reads i can't see has to how i would change anything but the tense nit.
thanks for the read jack.