Ode 2 Snoots I Knew

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Nice little internal rhymes going on here, Sid, they're very subtle but definitely enhance the sonics, along with the alliteration. As you employ end rhyme in your couplet, though, I would suggest wrapping it up with iambic pentameter, as in:

We hoi polloi will sit back, ooh and sigh,
and watch the bacon fledglings flying by

(your final line at the moment is trochaic and just throws things out a little)

Most enjoyable, I know exactly where you're coming from!

Thanks Leanne,
I agree and will apply your suggested correction. It is often those subtle changes in meter I have a bit of trouble wrapping my brain around.

Pigs still just wallow here I'm afraid

One of the few poetry places I have seen where the main players (Mods, owner, et al), do not require us (the common ruck), to genuflect. I am proud to grunt and wallow here as well.

Sid